Jamie

My First Recording

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Hey guys,

I don't want much criticism with this. I know it ain't the best. For one I recorded this at 1 AM in the morning after writing the lyrics. I'd just like to know from some users, do you like it, yes or no? It's only like 20% done... I need to re-record the lyrics, take this as a small demo as it were...

Don't say its good if it isn't I want yes or no. I'm taking this seriously as if it ain't any good, I ain't going to bother trying to record any of my stuff again.

Lyrics So Far...

At an early age,

I fell in love.

Unfortunatley,

I messed it up.

I was young,

I was hopeless, I screwed up the moment.

Now I'm torn inside of what we could have been

I was lost

And you found me,

I was hurt and you healed me.

Now I've lost the most precious thing

Chorus

Trying to figure out

How to get you back, In my life

Don't want to mess around

Because you, You are life

And I know

It was my fault inside

But give me a chance

To make it right

Thanks guys, Hope you enjoy it. Talk to you later :D

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I love the intro Jamie, but when the guitar came in I just got shivers down my spine. Don't get me wrong, I didn't get shivers because it was bad I got them because it was really freakin' good.

Nice work Jamie :D

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Guitar: as always, is awesome.

Lyrics: surprisingly good... Today, this could reach number 1 with the difference of people not hating your guts :P

Voice: meh, you were never much of a singer anyway :P

also, your need to time the lyrics to match the guitar playing, they are off by miles.

Some of the lyrics need a bit of a touch up, and moved around, eg. make

I was young,

I was hopeless, I screwed up the moment.

Now I'm torn inside of what we could have been

The Chores and make it more up tempo than the verse's.

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Can't really think of a good reply to this, but I did like it. Guitar's great, good lyrics, well thought out, though sometimes out of sync with the guitar while singing. Moar please? :P

P.S. Shame I couldn't download this to my phone.

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Cheesy but honest.

Reminds me of my cousins stuff :)

 

 

Production on the guitar and vocals is nice and clear. I really like the backwards stuff.

 

You use any synths or programs? It would be awesome to hear a backwards violin type thing.

 

Regardless of my opinion, keep going no matter what and have some fun and release some emotions along the way. For me thats the main reason I make music.

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Thanks, Appreciate the feedback. 


Literally use Cubase 5 and Audacity for recording and production. I did the intro by reversing the start of the song, sounded interesting so I added it in :P

 

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